haiku retrospective ccxl

At first I wrote:

cracked work gloves
the smoke from the brush fire
mingles with the fog

Then, remembering the brush fires in Costa Rica, I decided to try:

cracked work gloves
the smoke from the brush fire
mingles with the night

Then I read it to my daughter, and she suggested replacing “night:”

cracked work gloves
the smoke from the brush fire
mingles with the wasps


cracked work gloves
the smoke from the brush fire
mingles with the mist

And I tried a few more:

cracked work gloves
the smoke from the brush fire
mingles with the gnats


cracked work gloves
the smoke from the brush fire
mingles with the stars


cracked work gloves
the smoke from the brush fire
mingles with the dawn

But I think I like this one best:

cracked work gloves
the smoke from the brush fire
mingles with the trees


19 January 2003