haiku retrospective ccclxix

This started with an online discussion with my friend Jennie over an attempt to write a haiku to express a particular moment in her life. The discussion evolved to a playful series of haiku about haiku failures.

winter wind --
she uses her failed haiku
to start the fire


(And that's not, either)


christmas muzac --
pale sunshine skims the tops
of the trees

This started as something like:

christmas muzac --
the pale sunshine can't make it
through the trees

or

christmas muzac --
the pale sunshine can't penetrate
the trees

or

christmas muzac --
the stubborn sunshine won't filter
through the trees


Winter sunshine is so weak and anemic compared to the summer variety. I feel like I live in a dark hollow under all these trees when the days are short.

Have a lovely weekend, Jennie.

christmas muzac --
no sign of the sun
in the mall

9 December 2005