march skies
wood chips and spiders
in the woodshed
Does this haiku give you the idea that there's not much left in
the woodshed except wood chips and spiders? Would it help to
state it more explicitly? I've tried a few different ways, and every
one has made it less of a haiku rather than more of one.
26 March 2003
march skies --
the rumble of trucks
on the distant highway
26 March 2003
war news
dead bean vines rustle
in the breeze
26 March 2003
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